My Rocking Week
worked week ends on a brand input plan
went on monday to mumbai , courtsey a jet vimaan
cooped up the entire tuesday in office for a meeting that just ran and ran
began a party at 11 , finished at 2 , got up at 4 for the morning flying swan
reached b'lore , on wednesday and the same mumbai drill began
tried meeting ppl and friends , but that proposal went to the tin can
thursday back to kolkata and thot my busy life would now be put to a ban
but on friday b fast was in delhi and lunch enroute to jaipur in a mini van
saturday was for market at ajmer and some blessings from ajmer's most famous man,
sunday enroute to delhi was a major accident ,me and my taxi fried like a butter naan,
went for an x ray, as well as a ct scan,
luckily , am still as fit as jackie chan
met parents had lunch with them at delhi and dinner was back in kolkata man
and now my life is back to kolkata where it all began.
went on monday to mumbai , courtsey a jet vimaan
cooped up the entire tuesday in office for a meeting that just ran and ran
began a party at 11 , finished at 2 , got up at 4 for the morning flying swan
reached b'lore , on wednesday and the same mumbai drill began
tried meeting ppl and friends , but that proposal went to the tin can
thursday back to kolkata and thot my busy life would now be put to a ban
but on friday b fast was in delhi and lunch enroute to jaipur in a mini van
saturday was for market at ajmer and some blessings from ajmer's most famous man,
sunday enroute to delhi was a major accident ,me and my taxi fried like a butter naan,
went for an x ray, as well as a ct scan,
luckily , am still as fit as jackie chan
met parents had lunch with them at delhi and dinner was back in kolkata man
and now my life is back to kolkata where it all began.
posted by tanmay at
4:31 AM
1 Comments:
A rocking week is apoem in which writer has attempted to mingle your thoughts with the happenings around you and the circumstances …
Definitely a refreshing and a well deserved break from the earlier attempts and seems that writer is somewhat successful too in this .
But here comes the big one as seemingly Tanmay is also in a real hurry , the writer although has tried to compose a poem that has been written with seemingly effortless ease , however there seems to be unnecessary stress on making the end words rhyme.
It is a very common perception that poem has to have ending with rhyming words however it is not so , a very good example of this is Vikram Seth and his poems .
Along with that , lack of proper punctuation also distracts you somewhat to an extent.
As in first half it is almost missing but all is well in later half ..
Definitely a worth reading and makes you look for the future endeavors …,
One on reading will give our simple minds a lot of pleasures ….
Might not be good but tried an earnest attempt …
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